Please read my poem,and tell me what you think about it?

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  • I'm not a poet,,just a teen who enjoy poetry

    Love is mortal

    We have the words, love has the wings
    love is our dear companion
    great traveler, He is
    He share the road of two people
    sometime, He left us half-way

    Love is a god, we Humans think
    We admire the heavenly feeling
    A special union, a divine Love
    but when hate will be born, fire! fire!
    two pressing hearts, A forbidden Union
    The rope will breaks, Love will be dead




  • i think that even tough you arent a poet this poem is very good


  • It's pretty good, but there's a few small errors in it. For instance, it should be "He shareS the road", instead of "He share the road".

    Good job, though, I liked it. :D


  • rope of love never breaks and love shall always live...that should be the last line instead of the rope...dead







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